April – I really enjoyed reading both of your posts because the two posts contained very different tones. In your first blog you seem playful and your voice really shines through whereas in your second blog (Homosexuality in the Animal Kingdom), you have a very objective tone. I think it’s nice to see the variation in your writing J. Your intro in the first blog was AWESOME! Also, your word choice in the second blog really pulled the piece together and gave it a professional tone. I think I enjoyed your first post more because of the anecdote beginning and the voice you gave to it (you gave it serious personality). I think the argument in the second blog could be supported a bit more, but your idea was definitely understandable. Also, I liked how you included your own opinion, but at the end I think a tying together of all ideas is needed too. Overall they were both interesting, well-written (fun!!) pieces!
Tasha – I really liked the tone of your Homosexuality in the Animal Kingdom blog! You made the subject fun and appealing and funny! You are very good at introductions because you constantly write intros that pull the reader in (in creative ways)! Your conclusion was hilarious! The body was supportive of your idea (although I might have liked to see more from the article) and the conclusion drew everything together. I also like how your opinion pervaded the majority of the paper in a very fluid way. Great job! Your women’s sexual desires blog was also very interesting and I commend you for finding extra information! I think you did a great job describing the article – it was very succinct. You are really proficient at taking (what can be) difficult or confusing information and breaking it down in an easy-to-read format. I really enjoyed reading both of your blog posts, keep up the great work!
And thank you guys for being awesome :)
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