Tasha – Once again, I really admire that you can easily incorporate direct quotations into your posts…I always forget to do that. Also, your intro to the monogamy blog was interesting because (with the questions) I was actually quite interested (even though we were all doing the same thing XD). I also enjoy how you include your own opinion into the text fluidly and I agree with you about the preservation of monogamous marriages. Bringing in the interplay of overpopulation and how the evolutionary psych view is a bit outdated in that respect (or perhaps their explanation of our evolution) was a great point. Also, what’s pretty interesting is that in one of my classes we discussed fertility rates and their decrease over the past 30 years. At this point, the fertility rate is around 2.0 – 2.2 (the replacement rate – as in one child to replace each parent) and is even below the replacement rate (2.0) in some countries! So we really may be tending toward simply having children in order to have a family (like you said). Oh, and in the intro I did notice a little typo with the period, but I still got the gist of what you were saying. In your “Why isn’t he listening?!” blog (love the title, by the way), I really enjoyed your personal stories and thought that your voice was very strong throughout the piece. Overall they were both enjoyable reads and I agreed with most (if not all) of the points you made!
April – Your word choice in your monogamy blog was awesome! It felt very professional and made the piece more interesting J. I also enjoyed your usage of direct quotation, I seriously need to start doing that! (You also picked a very valid quote that aptly supported your statement). I think that you made very valid points from the article and presented them well, but I think a concluding paragraph is necessary…the blog sort of just ended after the second point was introduced. I would have definitely liked to see more because I really liked the style of writing you displayed! Your Sex, Lies and Conversation piece was well-written and whole (as in introduction, body and conclusion), yet I would have liked more points from the article (and your correlating experiences) presented in the blog as it presented solely one. The blog was very fluid and I enjoyed how you included yourself and your experience with the article (the light bulb) as it made me excited about the article as well.
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